NDE

Good evening Ryan,

I'm in the process of piecing together Act Eleven, or Chapter Eleven, entitled Fatherhood Failure. There's a scene in here where you see yourself dying, as a premonition. Then the NDE happens, right?

I feel the NDE should come just before the Intermission, or chapter break, not after.

Go back to the point where she says, "You see that!? That's how much longer you've got to be alive!"

Tell me what your thoughts are here, we need more. You need to tell me everything you remember!